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they greet me like old friends,
ivory hands gripping my
shoulders a little too tight
to be forgiving

i tell them that i'm sorry,
and they know what i mean,
their smiles fade and the black
holes on their faces start to furrow

and i explain that it's not
quite time, not yet
i still haven't worked up the guts
to let them out

but they've heard this spiel before,
and it's getting harder to
silence the rattling, a myriad of
skulls and ribs that i can no longer
hide
i don't have my secrets, my secrets have me
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keitone Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you are so amazing!!!!!!!! XD XD I love that anadiplosis-- "I dont have my secrets, my secrets have me" your poetry has so much feeling in it!! 
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Perhaps you are the skeleton in their closet. . . .
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
i am honoured to be included there, thank you so much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

god damn :heart:

my secrets have me...yes. Wow :heart: that smashed my heart - love it!

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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This totally kicks ass.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
:giggle: aw thanks! i'm glad you like it!
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Professional Writer
I love your description, we are all owned by our secrets
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Skeletons in the closet...I think mine rattle too. This is amazing. Gave me chills. :+favlove:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013
:thanks:
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love this 
great job 
<3 (:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
thank you :tighthug: i'm glad you like it!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013   Writer

Just a grammar thing -- "myriad" basically means "a lot of," so you don't use the "a" nor the "of." It's just "myriad": "myriad skulls," in this case. The editor in me is coming out.

 

It's a lovely piece, overall. Nice work. :heart:

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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
all my life i have seen and heard the word myriad used as 'a myriad of', i've never heard of just the word myriad.
i felt rather dumb, so i looked it up, and i think from what i've read it is okay to use it either way.
thank you though :hug:
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Professional Writer
a poet can use any word they like,
for who knows the meaning of the poem but the author
as for grammar,
what great poet follows the rules?
or even chooses to complete a word when it benefits him not to?
I defend your usages,
an artist is not defined by rules,
but rather the rebellion of them.

Did I mention, I love this work?
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013   Writer
Apologies. Grammar mavens still demand "myriad" be used without the "a" and the "of." It looks as though it has crept into the dictionary the other way, though. I'll still stick to my guns, but I understand where you're coming from. :)
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Student Writer
Everyone has a skeleton in their closet.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
:nod:
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