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and i stopped killing spiders
when i realized that we are both just trying
to make our way in the world
and he hasn't got a clue
how he ended up on my bathroom floor

and i can turn out the lights to
stop the moths from killing themselves
but i can't turn off my brain and
stop myself from doing the same
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SpiritFingers Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014
Like a punch to the gut. Beautiful, concise, brilliant.
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DerAleksandra Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Good god, this is perfect Really Sad 
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fried-soup Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I feel like a coward when I favorite a bunch of one person's work without commenting on anything, like plucking a handful of well-tended flowers from the edge of someone's yard and hoping they don't see me as I scurry on my way. So I'm here to say bless you, your poems are so sincere, they seem to speak directly of the beauty and struggles of humanity...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
well i do not mind in the slightest. i think a favourite on a piece of my writing is flattering it far enough! so please don't feel bad at all :hug:
thank you very much for the favourites though! and also for the kind words :heart::thanks:
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fried-soup Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
You are welcome. Your poems are lovely, even then morose ones.
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bodhi-christa Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This is pretty awesome. I don't kill spiders anymore either :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
thank you :thanks:
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bodhi-christa Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
My pleasure :)
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JinnyBlue Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow too damn amazing 
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iwasearnestonce Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014
oh god have we known each other? ( hi last year and this year in writing thank you)
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7thCobweb Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
:iconthisplz:




I wish I could find the words to describe my relation to it. Although it hurts me to read it (because it's the truth), I love it. 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
i'm glad that you like it, and even though it hurts you, i'm glad that you can connect with it :thanks: :heart:
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one-rosy-cheek Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013
I find it strange that I feel most compassionate whenever I feel the most helpless.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013
i know that feeling exactly. you'd think it would have the opposite effect.
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
literally all i said when i finished this poem was holy shit because honestly
holy shit 
this is such a good poem i love the whole form and each line is powerful but each line is more powerful than the last and its just so
impactful and jesus christ youre such a good writer wow
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
:faint: i don't know what to say
i just
holy shit, thank you
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no worries, love ♥♥♥
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17Sevens Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
"Do no harm."
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
exactly :nod:
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Professional Writer
I have now memorized this and relayed it to too many people. I say it every time I am confronted by an insect, To say you have changed my life with this one verse would not be untrue. I know I have told you thank you for your work so many times, and to comment on the same one twice may be bad etiquette, but I love this one!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
i have been thinking about your comment all day. i think it has shocked me to some degree. i am just so overwhelmed and happy that my words could have such an effect on somebody and i can't properly express what i'm feeling right now haha. thank you for this, it will stay with me forever.

i don't feel it's bad etiquette at all :huggle:
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NinaKoshka Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wish I could Favorite this again,.... But I already did :iconmisakithinkplz:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013
well, for me to now know that if there were an option for multiple favourites, you would have favourited it again? that's as good as actually getting two from you if you ask me :P thank you!
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Professional Writer
So, true, I wish I could turn out the lights so I could stop killing myself too.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013
:cling:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Holy moly. It's like you're in my head.
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Moths always make me cry. This poem did too; lovely words.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
i'm sorry :cling:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
It's okay; it's the at least semi-good kind of cry; the kind where you're so relieved that someone else gets it, you can't help but shed a few tears.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is so strong
ugh
feels like a kick in the shin. in the best way possible
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
i am sorry about that :cling:
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aMidnightMasquerade Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
spiders are our friends, most certainly. 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
:nod:
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"and i can turn out the lights to
stop the moths from killing themselves
but i can't turn off my brain and
stop myself from doing the same"

Can I simply say, wow. Thats just....wow.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
:thanks:
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am a dummy! 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
God...I am just struck into silence. Thank you for this...For wording everything so perfectly, so precisely.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
... thank you :blush: i'm so glad you like it :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was amazing! How could I not like it? :la:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
:huggle:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
thank you so much :faint:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
you are so very welcome. you deserve it. :)
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therootcellar Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
i love the last stanza. love. so good. :)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
thank you! i'm glad you like it :)
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therootcellar Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Student Writer
:)
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
whoawhoawhoa.
amazing poem.
wow.
it is painful how much this relates to me.
makes me sad, but i don't mind much.

wonderful piece. :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
thank you, very much. :cling:
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skygazing Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
this is beautiful, from beginning to end :heart:
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